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My head hurts. It pounds within my skull. A quiet sigh escapes my dry lips. I'm staring at the floor. Avoiding those glaring eyes, a snarling mouth. In an attempt to escape this bitter reality, I think of that one thing that brings me happiness. You.

Words still pummel me. I'm slowly breaking. Every critism, every shriek. It's wearing down on my soul. But I think of tomorrow, when I can see you. Your voice will lift me. You make me cry in joy after I cry from pain stemmed from verbal abuse. Flying through the house, out the door. I tear down the street, as tear drops slide down my face. I call for you, wanting you here. But you don't come. You can't.

"Just accept it," I tell myself. Lies and more untruthful statements wedge themselves inside me. I am unimportant. I have no future. I am a failure. Putting so much faith in you, it makes me vulnerable. You aren't here, how will I get through my bitter life? If you can't appear, who will be my shoulder to cry on?

Independance. It is one of many things I lack. I cannot stumble through a single day without needing to vent. It's a wonder you still put up with my mindless rants. You should hate me. When have I ever provided comfort for you? Take take take, never returning. But I can't bring myself to it. It's too difficult, my own selfish problems.

I write this so you may know how much I appreciate you. You're my lifeline. But the last thing I want to do is add pressure onto your already weighted shoulders... But I need you still. There are only three small yet powerful words that can fully encase my emotions. You already know them. But I'll say it anyway.

I love you.

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Interpret this however you may. 'Tis dedicated to my best friend, =Roxy-Graphics. Not really sure what I think of it. Definitely emotional, but the general writing kind of sucks. Meh. I don't care. The feels are too overwhelming for me. :iconyesyoucanplz:

Shout out to ~KNR19 for your amazing fanfic that inspires me~

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Very good writing style, emotionally moving. Short, which is nice, and you get the point across in the very short verse. I want to encourage you to keep writing about this stuff you're dealing with because if it's good like this, you'll be able to put out your own book soon. The third verse is a little tricky though, a bit harder to understand at a first glance. Had to go over it a few times to get the full meaning. I think it's mainly how you word the first couple of sentences in that verse. It kinda threw me off with the rest of the verse, like there is more than one topic.
Anyway, for the first writing I've seen from you, I'd say it's great!
Good Job!
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~KNR19 Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I just re-read this and realized I didn't even comment! :shocked: This is soooo perfect!! It made me cry! Thank you for the shoutout :blowkiss: That warms my heart to know that I actually inspire someone with my work :blushes: Thank you so much :heart:
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Mood: Wow! ~vie-pour-les-chevaux Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is beautiful. It reminds me of one of my exes - it's just perfect.
Well, if the mean people and the nice person are the same person, then it's perfect lol
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Mood: Wow! ~articfoxice Dec 22, 2012  Student General Artist
this feels like, from the soul! amazing
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=Roxy-Graphics Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Omg, Jass this is amaing. Omg. I love you! I'm crying. Wow, just wow! :heart:
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